Voter ID
Hi everyone, we want to inform
you about something important in the society. There are some very strange and
complicated rules, which can make it difficult for everyone without a gun license
or a driver’s license to get their right to vote “back”.
Now you may think
-what makes it so difficult to
vote in this country.
Let us explain; before you can
vote you need to register as a voter. This is easy enough to understand but the
difficult part is how you are registered as a voter, to do that you need to
have an ID-card with a picture of you and your address. When you have a card
with these three things, you can get your right to vote “back”.
These laws makes it difficult
to vote for black people, pour people, old people and students. These laws
makes it especially hard for people that want Obama as president, to vote.
Remember if you are a stereotype
republican then you have nothing to fear for getting your right to vote back.
Source:
names: Adam, Caroline, Cecilia, Jonatan, Katrine and Malthe
1. Grammatik
SvarSlet- stavefejl - pour = at hælde, poor = fattig
2. Gode råd
- Layoutet bliver lidt kedeligt i længden. Måske kunne man have sat et billede eller noget ind.
- Sætningen "Now you may think
-what makes it so difficult to vote in this country." Mangler et spørgsmålstegn, fordi det er et spørgsmål og vil normalt være en sætning ;)
Super fint indlæg og godt at I taler direkte til publikum
SvarSletNogle små kommentarer:
Brug evt "our society" i stedet for "the society" når I i forvejen taler direkte til os
Brug evt "deprive" i sætningen "When you have a card with these three things, you can get your right to vote “back”." i stedet for "back"
Overskriften kunne evt. være mere fængende
I nævner at man skal have tre ting på sit ID for at kunne stemme, men I nævner kun to ting.
Diverse kongruens fejl, for eksempel: I skriver "makes" i stedet "make", og det skal være uden "s" i flertal.
I skriver det er svært for sorte, ældre, studerende og fattige at stemme. Hvorfor?
Desuden ville det være skønt med en blid slutning
Mvh Olga og Maria
1.Grammatik
SvarSletDejligt forståeligt sprog, som ikke er for svært. Grammatikken er generelt fin, men nogle sætninger er lidt knudrede og lange.
2. Gode råd
Nogle ting er bare nævn og ikke uddybet særlig godt i forhold til relevansen. Fx hvorfor det er svært for sorte, fattige og gamle mennesker at stemme.
Et eller to billeder ville have været dejligt :-)